Sunday, February 07, 2010

thinking of you

my breath of fresh air
every time i think of you
i forget to breathe

* Haiku: A Japanese poem composed of three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables.
* for HaikuBones prompt: breath

8 comments:

Greyscale Territory said...

Delightful twist and hint of irony in this otherwise romantic poem! Lovely!

gautami tripathy said...

I too like that twist!

cryptic messages

Also don't forget to post your creative works at Monday Poetry Train Revisitedon Monday mornings!

SOL said...

I like the twist too--works perfectly.

angie said...

I love the shift in the end!

rdl said...

good one!!

Tumblewords: said...

Nicely done!

ladygarfield said...

Thankyou all.

Jim said...

Breath taking! Your poet was thinking very deep over a very much liked person to forget breathing!
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Did you ever stop breathing for no obvious reason? It's scary!
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